this is my persuasive essay, what do I need to do to make it better help :))

This Is My Persuasive Essay, What Do I Need To Do To Make It Better Help :))

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Answer 1
change all the condensed words like wasn’t to was not to make it appear longer. try to give your own point of view and a conclusion sentence and why you chose what u chose
Answer 2

Answer:

It looks awesome so far!

If I were to give any help, I'd say to take away the "I think" in the first sentence (unless your teacher told you to start like that).

In the first paragraph, make sure to add a coma in between 'adults' and 'and' so it reads "It's very bad for children, adults, and teenagers." There is still other mistakes with the punctuation, but I think you can fix the others.

It looks like you know when to put your apostrophe in words, but I did find  that the 'there' in the last sentence of the first paragraph needs to be like "there's". That's all I could see with that, though, so good job!

Lastly, you don't need to say the subject so often. The reader will know what you're talking about, so using 'it' won't hurt anything. Other than that, everything looks pretty good.

Good luck!

Explanation:


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question involves bullying answer in at least 3 sentences for 30 points: How can you promote equity in a race with people of different ages?

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Answer:

its not 30 points its 15

Explanation:

i’m taking a midterm and need help asap explanation as well to prove the answer is correct thanks

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Answer:

c.

Explanation:

She had felt sorrow for the first time, so of course, it would change her view of the world. before she might have disliked the world but now she realizes not to take things for granted.

The advertisement contains an example of which persuasive technique?
OA. loaded words
OB. repitition
OC. testimonial
OD. leading question

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I need more stuff for the app sorry

Which words help you understand the tone you should
use when reading the passage aloud?
Based on the author's word choice, what is the tone of
the passage?

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Answer: Punctuation  

Explanation:

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Answer:”confidence” and “triumph”

Self-assured and cocky

Explanation:

1. If you were Johnny and Pony's lawyer, how would you defend them in a court of
law? (Give THREE reasons for your defense).
A.
В.
C.

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Answer:

Explanation:

I'm assuming you are writing about the death of the Soc. in the park. There are many reasons to deffend these boys. Some of the major reasons include:

1. Johnny was terrified the boys were going to drown Ponyboy in the park fountain.

2. The two Soc's initiated the fight by following the boys into the park and threatening them.

3. Johnny had been attacked by these same boys in the past and was affraid for his life.

Those are the main ones I would use.

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looking at the figurative language in paragraph 16 what type of figurative language is being used and what does it mean?

"the school was not so much a melting tie their griddle where Miss hopley and her helpers room knowledge into us and roasted racial hatred out of us"​

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The students were acting up or acting a surtent way and the teacher got mad and scolded them for a while.

Explanation: If its wrong I’m so sorry but hope this helps i think this is what it means.

Gatsby Chapter 1
What is Nick’s engagement? What does this tell us about his personal life?

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In The Great Gatsby, Gatsby tells Nick about his life because Nick is one of the few people who shows a genuine interest in becoming friends with Gatsby, and Gatsby wants Nick's approval. For this reason, he feels a desire for Nick to know him. But Gatsby also wants Nick to believe the wealthy persona and background that Gatsby has invented about himself as a way of making it real.

we will have signed the deal by this book into English (in passive voice)​

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Explanation:

we will have signed the deal by this book into English (in passive voice)

The deal will have been signed by this book into English by us.

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Why is the man's house filled with yellow haze?

A.

The thick fog has entered his house.

B.

The lights give off a strange glow.

C.

He hasn't cleaned his house in years.

D.

He is starting to lose his eyesight.

Answer = A

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The reason why the man's house is filled with yellow haze is because of the A.The thick fog has entered his house.

What is the reason for the yellow haze?

The  reason for the yellow haze in the house can be attributed top the presence of the thick frog that he can not explained in the house and as a result of this he was seeking for the way o get ride of the frogs because they were so irritating to him.

It should be noted that the man was not in the mood when he notice that the frog has entered into the house, at first he was thinking may be the frog is not that much which made him not to bother so much but as the time passes by he discovered that he needs to buckle up so that he can get them out.

Therefore, option A is correct.

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Read this sententence from Selena's draft. What type of word is missing?

First we____
some watercolor paintings.

А
adjective

B
noun

C
conjunction

D
verb

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Answer:

a

Explanation:

A
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Which of the following best describes why Douglass chose to include a passage about the treatment of old Barney and young Barney in his narrative?

to illustrate the collective hardships of life as a slave
both of these
to illustrate the wrath and fickle nature of Colonel Lloyd
neither of these

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A) to illustrate the collective hardships of life as a slave

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"What if the scallops bite me?" Alicia asked, rather more loudly and fearfully than she really wanted to sound. "It won't hurt much," her brother, Ron, teased. "But if it does, I am fully prepared to amputate." "You are not helping," Alicia shrieked. Ron was driving the boat, and he clearly knew what he was doing. He had been running boats, working crab traps since Alicia was old enough to notice such things. Still, she wasn't sure she trusted him to tell her the truth about things. She was younger, and he liked to tease. She often found herself soaking wet from a dunk, or the loser in a game he'd "forgotten" to explain the rules for. She loved him nonetheless. He brought her treasures from his traps. He told her stories of strange creatures he'd seen in the salt marshes. "Seriously," Ron continued, slowing the boat down, "they can't really hurt you. It's just a bivalve." "Bivalve means 'two valves,'" Alicia said, "but that doesn't tell me anything about how hard they bite." Spray from the waves speckled Alicia's back and shoulder. She had turned to talk to Ron, but she also was enjoying a break from getting the spray in her face. It was a warm sunny day, but Alicia knew if the wind picked up she could get chilled. "Look, it's not going to hurt if you get bitten," Ron said, taking her seriously now. "If you just pick them up from the back you won't have any trouble. Shoot, you pick up crabs all the time and they have a much more painful pinch than a scallop." "Well, there's a bigger place to put my hand on a crab. Scallops are petite." "And squirty," Ron added. "You know they move by pushing water through their shell? But seriously, sis, they move slowly. They will be snuggled down in the sea grass when you see them and won't go far if they do move. You'll be fine. Now climb up on the bow, look out in the shallows, and see if you can see any." Ron had slowed the boat to an almost idle speed. Up ahead Alicia could see many boats anchored on the shallow flats. People walking around the boats would bend eve

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What exactly are you asking for?


Review the paragraph that starts on the bottom
of page 3 and continues on page 4. Which
conclusion can be drawn from the underlined
sentence in the paragraph?

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Answer:

The answer is asking for page 3-4, you only showed page 1 btw. Once its fixed, lmk and I can help out.

Answer:

Faxon Regrets taking the job as a secretary

Explanation:

Which work is the best example of an adaptation?
O A. A musical based on a book about a popular band
O B. A biography of the president of the United States
O C. A poem written by a best-selling playwright O D. A Pulitzer Prize-winning newspaper article​

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it’s A . A musical based on a book about a popular band

Janie's genuine love for Joe (pg 81/82)

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Answer: Following Joe's death, Janie meets the man who represents the true love of her life, Tea Cake Woods. He arrives in Eatonville as a fun-loving man who quickly falls for Janie's beauty and charm. Although Janie fears that she is too old for Tea Cake, she cannot help but fall in love with this man. Janie learned from her marriage to Jody Starks that she needs to think about her happiness and that a married couple should see each other as equals. Janie fell in love with Jody because of his big plans and his success. Janie knew that Jody never treated her as an equal and she did not love him because of it.

Explanation:

What activity is imperative for authors of narrative nonfiction?


Research

Name alteration

Sketching

Paraphrasing

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I believe it is paraphrasing.

who is malaysian here?

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Answer:

Here here here here here

12) Which sentence from the passage contains a false premise?

A)
Burt is a master of suspense and an almanac
of knowledge.

B)
As in his previous films, Howard Burt leaves a
strong impression on audiences.

C)
If you are at all interested in making the world
a better place, you must go see this movie!
When you put so much work into something,

D) it's extremely rewarding to get this type of
feedback

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Answer:

C

Explanation:

If you are at all interested in making the world

a better place, you must go see this movie!

Test item: Vocabulary
15. Read the following passage. Underline the correct word that fills the blank. The first one is done for
you.
A beggar was walking along the road. He was eating a bun because he felt (1) (thirsty, hungry, tired). He saw a
(2) (well, pond, hut) with a large white duck swimming round and round on it. He jumped over the (3) (road,
hive, fence)and caught the duck and took it out of the pond. He was sitting by the pond with a large pile of (4)
(clothes, food, feathers) beside him. A farmer saw this and came running across the field waving his arms. The
beggar hurriedly put the duck back into the (5) (sand, ground, water). The farmer asked the beggar 'What's the
matter with my duck?" "Ah" said the beggar quietly. "It wanted to go for a (6)
(6) (walk, game, swim) and
I'm looking after its clothes."​

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Answer:

A beggar was walking along the road. He was eating a bun because he felt HUNGRY He saw a, POND with a large white duck swimming round and round on it. He jumped over the FENCE and caught the duck and took it out of the pond. He was sitting by the pond with a large pile of FEATHERS beside him. A farmer saw this and came running across the field waving his arms. The beggar hurriedly put the duck back into the WATER. The farmer asked the beggar'What's the matter with my duck?" "Ah" said the beggar quietly. "It wanted to go for a SWIM and I'm looking after its clothes."

Which statement is NOT a prediction?
A. I think I will stay home tonight.
B. I think the wood will float when I put it into the water.
C. I think the salt will dissolve when I add water to the cup.
D. I think the balloon will pop when the chemicals react.

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A. I think I will stay home tonight
Its A. I think I will stay home tonight

Give me a job, any kind of job (A real job people)

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Answer:

Doctor.

Explanation:

Amazing Jobs: Being a Scientist, Librarian, or and Art director. (my dream job) Video game designer! You can also be a pet groomer, or a Nurse/Doctor!

can anyone write a 250 word essay about the first time seeing the beach​

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Answer:

Some dream's you remember, some you don't. That night I had dreamed of papa, taking me to the beach like he did every summer. But, I remember the very first time he took me, and the very first time I went. When I was there I could feel the sand beneath my feet, I could feel the warm, and happy summer breeze blowing agent's my skin. And the sight's were amazing. There was a ray of sunshine running through the curtain's and the bird's were calling their sweet crisp song. I knew it had come to be morning so I got up and looked around but the smile on my face had turned dark and grey once I realized we weren't in Minnesota anymore. I plopped down back in bed and rolled the pillow over my face to block the sun. A few minutes later I had dozed off again. This time I could here the sound's of the waves crashing agent's the shore. I could her papa's voice telling me the stories of the sailor who lived in the light house. I had only wished papa would have never left us. He said he just couldn't get along with mama anymore. So summer came, papa didn't. We couldn't pay rent so we had to move in with grandpa.

Mama came stumbling into the door yelling at me to get out of bed. All good dream's must come to an end so I listened to her and got up nd started my day.

Explanation:

Hopefully this help's. Yes I did type this out myself and my hand's hurt ;n;

This is about dreaming about the first time going to the beach but Will this still work??

HELP!! Which option correctly uses ellipses to quote the excerpt?
A. According to the website Amelia Earhart.com, "In 1937... she wanted to be the first woman to fly around the world."
B. According to the website AmeliaEarhart.com,"... In 1937,... she was ready for a monumental, and final, challenge: she wanted to be the first woman to fly around the world.
C. According to the website Amelia Earhart.com,"... she was ready for a monumental, and final, challenge: she wanted to be the first woman to fly around the world..."
D. According to the website Amelia Earhart.com, "as Earhart neared her 40th birthday, she was ready for a monumental, and final,
challenge..."

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A, I believe, since ellipses aren’t needed at the beginning or end of quotes.

Answer:

A. According to the website Amelia Earhart.com, "In 1937. . . she wanted to be the first woman to fly around the world."

Explanation:

The ellipsis marks replace only the words that were left out of the original quotation.

what is the meaning of the word condition in this sentence

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The state of something with regards

Who dies in "The Open Boat"? A. The Captain B. The Oiler C. The Cook​

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Answer:

B. The Oiler

Explanation:

Crane was stranded at sea for thirty hours when his ship, the SS Commodore, sank after hitting a sandbar. He and three other men were forced to navigate their way to shore in a small boat; one of the men, an oiler named Billie Higgins, drowned after the boat overturned.

Answer:

B

Explanation:

Hope this helps

What should you avoid while writing your first draft?
A. Distractions such as television or music
B. Using your outline to help you craft your draft
C. Thinking of new ideas that might fit into your essay
D. Adjusting each idea so it fits into a paragraph

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Answer:

A. Distractions such as television or music

you should avoid

Answer:

i think its A

Explanation:

what does a brainleast do

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Answer:

nothing really at least i don't think so

QUick Question
Irene has always been good under pressure. She decides to study medicine and wants to find a career where she can help people in trouble. A career in the Emergency and Fire Management Services pathway of the Law, Public Saftey, Corrections, and Security cluster might be a good fit for Irene. True False

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Answer:

True

Explanation:

A job in the emegency services and community welfare is good for people that work under pressure. She also states to help people in trouble.

Answer:

It's True

Explanation:

Thank you :)

write an essay about harmful effect of using mobile in about 150 words​

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Explanation:

Mobile phone is a very useful and essential gadget in our daily life. When used in moderation does not cause much harm. It is only when people use it unnecessarily and excessively, it leads to troubles. Talking over mobile phones for several minutes to hours over useless and insignificant topics is simply a waste of time.

It is one of the commonest abuses of this technological gadget. Doctors keep cautioning people that excessive and continuous use of phones is damaging for the health of a person. The rays that emit from these phones can lead to hearing problems and can impact other organs too over a prolonged period of excessive usage.

Another common abuse includes listening to high volume music. This is especially seen among teenagers who have a tendency to keep their phone in their pockets and put ear phones in their ears. This is a very common sight among people. They walk or drive on busy roads, or listen to high volume music. This makes them incapable to listen to the horn of an approaching vehicle. By not taking timely action it causes casualties. A lot of injuries happen in this way on a day to day basis.

Answer:

There are certain harmful health effects, which might be caused by the use of mobile phones. According to modern researches, the biggest hazard of mobile phones is the connection between cell phones and cancer. Even though the data remains controversial, most scientists agree that there is a certain threat from using cell phones too much. It is reported, that people who talk on the phone for several hours a day are 50% more likely to develop brain cancer.  

Which of the following contains a vague pronoun reference?

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