Please can someone grade this and tell me what to improve (I did the story)


How bad could it be? It was just wind and water, right.


March 12th, 10 pm. No more than a few hours ago, the sky was a canvas painted hues of red, orange, and pink, but all the colour in the sky had faded, leaving only a matt canvas with no stars to observe. That is when told.


Earlier the pavements moved as great rivers of humanity. Earlier, the roads were rivers of cars. Earlier, there had been a blur of people speaking all at once. Earlier, the sun’s heat had overtaken us. Earlier, I had been safe here. Earlier, I would not have imagined this.


Throughout the night, the clouds began to spit mercilessly, depriving us of sleep as we tossed and turned. The wind whispered in our ears, hissing, and whistling. Suddenly, a bright flash illuminated the dark room, followed by a clap of thunder pulling our souls out of our bodies.


The wind screamed as if it were a banshee. Layers of pregnant clouds clung to the buildings threatening to burst. The trees flinched, the grass shivered,


The clouds were churlish and kraken-cruel. They coughed out great gouts of water and thunking balloons of sopping moisture. The rain began hammering down. A bone crushing cold scalded our skin like acid.


The brick walls that had formed my cacoons for years were now amongst a pile of rubble. I watched as the soldiers surrounding our city were ripped from their roots and thrown to the ground covered in debris.


Was it just wind and water? No..no.

Answer:

The source with the most bias-free information is a selection from a biographical dictionary. This source would provide factual information about H. Vondermoot's life and would do it in an objective manner.

The answer to this question is option A. All you needed to do was to arrange it in a manner that explains the event that took place first

Answer:

(;-;)

Explanation:

Roses are red

violets are blue

gimme that neck

and that as too

Answer:

Are you a magician? Because when you are around everyone else disappears.

Answer:

B.) the state where a particular antonym is used.

Explanation:

Answer: D

Explanation: You first have to realize that 26 minutes is the same thing as "under a than half-hour." Once you see this, you know that the question is testing editing out repetition.

The original (answer A) doesn’t work, since it’s repeating the route length already described in the beginning of the sentence. Answer C has the same problem – it’s repeating the route time exactly as already expressed. Answer B takes one type of redundancy and replaces it with another since it’s just a variant of the words “to complete the route” already in the sentence.

So, the only answer that fixes all the redundancies is D.

Answer:

The point is  about the paragraph 5 , the term  "smuggler"  means :

                One who secretly moves something or someone from one country to another. Chaotic and frightening.

Answer:

¿what option yo chose ?

and I will help you

I would personally change some of your transition words that you have in here. For example, change it to “in the text” or “on this page”. It’s also not as fluid and doesn’t roll off the tongue as easily as normal

Explanation:

You want your paragraphs to flow and not be sidetracked on other topics. Have one to two sentences focusing on one thing about the story such as suspense, twists, plot points etc. Hope this makes sense :)

Answer:

In your first sentence, you put "fluid" but based off the rest of the sentence I believe you mean "fluent".

In your second sentence, put a period AFTER the word "interesting" and capitalize the "T" in "the".

In your fourth sentence, take away the period after the word "murder" and connect those sentences

In your sixth sentence, take away the comma and make "give" plural. So it should be "This sentence gives"

Lastly, in your second-to-last sentence take away the period after Lanyon.

Explanation:

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Thoreau wanted to analyze and examine the swiftest traveler because he have a keen interest in that case.

When Thoreau says, "i have found that no exertion of the legs can bring two minds much nearer to one another," he means that physical closeness doesn't guarantee intellectual or spiritual closeness.

Thoreau has expressed this riddle of the distance involved in being solitary in "Economy" and will express it again in "Visitors."

He points out that no amount of walking can bring people together, deliberately confusing "close physical proximity" with "agreeing with one another."

Learn more about Thoreau, refer to the link:

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Answer:

the audience is being entertained by clowns now.

sunscreen should be put on while you are here.

snowboards can be rented for the day.

ten pins must be knocked down to get a high score.

safety rules will be explained to us before we begin.

you have to climb a ladder to reach the front door.

many birthdays have been celebrated here since it opened.

Answer:

George has an intelligence way above normal. George has a government-mandated transmitter in his ear that makes a large sharp noise every twenty seconds to prevent him from taking unfair advantage of his brain.

Explanation:

Answer:

ur answer is in the link below lol jk

Explanation:

its b

Answer:

Hello There!!

Explanation:

I believe the answer is C. in their sense of personal identity.

hope thus helps,have a great day!!

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Answer:

ok please tell us your speech

Answer: B. Parents try to give children what they can to help them have a better life.

Explanation:

The option that identifies the theme of the text is that "Parents try to give children what they can to help them have a better life".

The detail from the text that supports the answer is when it was stated that there was nothing to give the child except the things regarding who he was and also where he came from. Since his pappy did something, he can do something as well.

Therefore, the correct option is B.

Answer:

the second one

Explanation:

Answer:

Ms. Lily Green - Choice 2

Explanation:

Answer:

B. Joining the Red Cross is a simple way to become more active in your community.

Answer:

here are two separate pictures of a women sad at work and a kid sad.

Answer:

Here are pictures for you

Explanation:

Answer:

Jerome complained, "We're going to be late, the boss will kill us." Is the grammatically correct sentence.

Explanation:

Answer:

B or c in my opinion if you check a it does not really show nth

Refer the attachment ! :)

POEM : Life

POET : Henry Van Dykê

TEXT: The following is a student draft. It may contain errors.

Two weeks before I started high school, my mother announced we would be moving . . . to an entirely different city, halfway across the country! Needless to say, I was horrified. I had already arranged for a way to avoid taking the bus carpooling with my friend Kwe and had signed up for all my classes and extracurricular activities. I was certain this new school wouldn't have nearly as many options, and I knew there was no way I was going to be able to set up a new carpool with only a few days to meet new people.

I would be moving away. I wondered, what would this new city be like; what would the people be like; what would people do with their time? I just couldn't fathom a life outside of the one I knew and so I began to worry about whether I would be able to fit in.

These were the thoughts that haunted me for the next fourteen days, as we packed all our possessions and loaded them into the moving truck; as we drove two thousand miles across the country; as we settled into our new apartment; and then, as I stood staring at the massive glass doors that led into the new school I would begin the next day. But as I stood there, hesitant to take another step into this unknown world, I realized something: things are never as bad as I think they will be.

Answer:

A.

And so, I decided to stop worrying and start looking forward to the adventure that awaited me.

Explanation:

According to the given narrative, the author talks about his horror at finding out from his mother that they would be moving to a new city. He was terrified about whether he would fit in and if he would be able to make new friends at his new school. He thought and pondered about this for the next fourteen days, but when they finally moved, he found out things were not as bad as he thought.

Therefore, the best resolution for the narrative is "And so, I decided to stop worrying and start looking forward to the adventure that awaited me."

Hi dear ,

How are you? I'm fine here. I would like to share with you my hobbies.I have a lot hobbies to do such as cycling,cooking,dancing, singing,drawing and many more.My most favorite hobby is cooking because I love to cook.I just cook with my mom at the weekend .They have a lots of benefits to cook instead you can spend the time with your family while cooking.You can cook your favourite dish or anything else.That's it for now bye.

hi dear ,

I just write down my point and elaborations .

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Answer:

3

Explanation:

Parallel structure (also called parallelism) is the repetition of a chosen grammatical form within a sentence.

From the given options, the excerpt from "The Yellow Wallpaper" that supports the theme that doctors in the 19th century did not take into account the opinions and needs of mentally ill patients when treating them, is the corresponding to option A, because it says that the physician of high standing

Answer:

Tree's are producers and they turn water and sunlight into energy they need to live and grow. AKA Photosynthesis

Explanation:

Answer:

A

Explanation: The comma seperates each dpendent clause of the sentence along with the person, "Modanna."

The correct answer to this open question is the following.

This would be The correct answer to this open question is the following.

Although we cannot technically design the poster, we gladly can share the 50 or so words for your friend who has planned to set up a small library by putting up books on his terrace.

"Knowledge Terrace."

Reading books was never so much fun.

Like books? Like fresh air and cozy environments. Make sure you visit "Knowledge Terrace," a different place to read, imagine, and learn.

Visit us at____(here you ad the address and include your social media and websites).

Get your books the way you like at "Knowledge Terrace."

In these cases, the more specific you are with your text, the better for the people to remind your main idea and the address of the library.